Holy shit, those last two sentences! Things went kind of dizzy and grey for me too, for a second there. FOR THE LOVE OF GOD GIVE THAT MAN A HUG, STAT!!!!
Re your tense question, I wouldn't say that using present tense is frowned upon. I see it more frequently these days (in professional writing, I mean) although it's associated very strongly with YA fiction, at least in Australian fiction. There's an immediacy to the present tense which can be extremely effective, particularly when engaging young readers. Whatever tells your story most effectively is always the right choice. :)
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Date: 2012-06-09 05:15 pm (UTC)Re your tense question, I wouldn't say that using present tense is frowned upon. I see it more frequently these days (in professional writing, I mean) although it's associated very strongly with YA fiction, at least in Australian fiction. There's an immediacy to the present tense which can be extremely effective, particularly when engaging young readers. Whatever tells your story most effectively is always the right choice. :)