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[impulsereader]

Would someone please Britishize this for me? I don't think the imagery is right for John.

Simon was so angry that he very inadvisably dropped his (bloody gorgeous antique [the complete and utter tosser]) rifle in a fit of temper, then began to screech and hop around like a jackrabbit in heat. John didn’t even register the report of the gun going off until after he’d begun this bizarre and fascinating behaviour.

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[northernwalker]

Well, I can't Britpick the whole piece, but jackrabbits are New World, not Old World.

[impulsereader.livejournal.com]

Yes, definitely too american. *frowns*

[northernwalker]

Maybe a crazed kangaroo?

[impulsereader.livejournal.com]

I need something which conjures a seriously cartoonish visual - but in a very british way. this is possibly just not possible.

[mizz-history.livejournal.com]

I and others I know use the phrase 'mad as a box of frogs'...

[impulsereader.livejournal.com]

That is a pretty good visual. My first reaction is to add - with a lid on it - dunno why - is it funnier if the frogs are bouncing around the box (off the walls) because they have no way of getting out?

[mizz-history.livejournal.com]

I've always imagined that there's a lid on said box... ;oP

[impulsereader.livejournal.com]

Your input on both fronts is gratefully received. Thank you!

[mizz-history.livejournal.com]

No problem :o)

[djarum99.livejournal.com]

Hare, instead of jackrabbit? I think the UK has hares; I know we have jackrabbits up here in the PNW :-)

[impulsereader.livejournal.com]

The whole phrase sounds too american. I was hoping there's a completely alternate British image which I could substitute. I'm also a bit fussed because I'm not sure if rabbits of any sort go into heat. I suppose I should just google that to satisfy my curiosity.

[northernwalker]

They do have a breeding season in spring. It's supposedly where the phrase, "Mad as a March hare" comes from.

[impulsereader.livejournal.com]

Ah, that makes sense. Now that I think about it we always had to scout for nests in the spring to keep from mowing them out of existence.

[mizz-history.livejournal.com]

Mad as a March hare is well-used here.

[impulsereader.livejournal.com]

so if all else fails, I can have Simon screech and hop about, looking mad as a March hare?

[mizz-history.livejournal.com]

Indeed :o)

[natsuko1978.livejournal.com]

I would agree vis a vis the "March hare" - though they are best known for boxing each other rather than jumping.

However, to me, if someone is *that* angry, you'd probably use another word for "angry" - livid, furious, etc. Also "screech" sounds a bit wrong too. (At least to me.)

Hmm. Maybe "Simon was so livid that he very inadvisably dropped his ... rifle [would it be a rifle or a shotgun?] in a fit of temper, then began to yelp and hop about like he was on a pogostick." ???